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Post by rebeccamorgan on Jul 23, 2015 18:00:37 GMT -5
Or Cyth's captors could just let him keep it. Cyth is asleep when he gets captured so it would be hard for him to hide it. Assuming he leaves it on at night and doesn't take it off.
Another option could be that Magbar takes it and when Cyth kills him Cyth could get his necklace back.
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Post by ivyrose on Jul 23, 2015 20:42:31 GMT -5
Jewelry is what I was thinking, too. Perhaps like the necklaces you made with the pretty wires around the stone? If it were small enough Cyth could put it in his boot or something. (I know, funny place but it could work.)
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Post by ivyrose on Jul 23, 2015 20:43:22 GMT -5
Or Cyth's captors could just let him keep it. Cyth is asleep when he gets captured so it would be hard for him to hide it. Assuming he leaves it on at night and doesn't take it off. Another option could be that Magbar takes it and when Cyth kills him Cyth could get his necklace back. Good idea, Rebecca. |
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Jul 24, 2015 7:02:47 GMT -5
Or Cyth's captors could just let him keep it. Cyth is asleep when he gets captured so it would be hard for him to hide it. Assuming he leaves it on at night and doesn't take it off. Another option could be that Magbar takes it and when Cyth kills him Cyth could get his necklace back. Good idea, Rebecca. That is a good idea. And it can add more tension too, with Cyth determined to get the necklace back. Another idea is for Analissa to give him a scarf...only perhaps call it by another name. Analissa could have embroidered a message on the underside of it, and/or a verse or two from the Declarations. That way I could get more sensory details and it could be useful as well. But then there wouldn't be the desperation to get it back... I'll have to think on it. What do you think of the scarf/wrap idea? |
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Post by rebeccamorgan on Jul 24, 2015 11:19:52 GMT -5
I think Cyth would be desperate to get the scarf back. After all, Analissa made it for him.  Magbar could take it and wear the scarf just to make Cyth angry. But I'm thinking that if the scarf had verses from the Declarations on it, Draygan would have it burned before Cyth's very eyes. |
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Post by ivyrose on Jul 24, 2015 12:04:18 GMT -5
Either way, with jewelry or a scarf, Cyth should be determined to get it back. More so with jewelry because typically, if handmade, jewelry is irreplaceable.
You could even have some parts where Magbar teases Cyth about his girl (because Magbar suspects that Cyth has a special friend who trusts him with such a meaningful scarf/jewelry,) therefore making Cyth all the more desperate to get the article (whatever it is) back.
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Post by SisterofSix on Jul 25, 2015 9:29:09 GMT -5
I don't mean to distract from the subject at hand, but I was wondering, Hope, if Cyth's name is pronounced 'Sith' and if so if you would be concerned to know when I read it like that I think of the Sith from Star Wars and so am associating your protagonist with the Dark Side now.
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Jul 25, 2015 12:02:49 GMT -5
It is pronounced like S-eye-th, so no, the pronunciation isn't the same.  Well, I suppose it could be pronounced K-eye-th too...I'm not sure which one I started with, but I pronounce his name with the 'c' saying the 's' sound now. |
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Jul 26, 2015 7:29:49 GMT -5
I have a quick question. I have two versions of a prophecy and am not sure which I like better. I'm not quite sure about the rhythm of the second to last line of the first one, but I'm afraid the changes I've made on it (second version) seems like I'm trying too hard. Anyway, here they are.
The valley gleamed white
The fire blazed bright
The mist bound tight
And a shout from the height
Heralds your doom as in their plight
The love of twins sets all to right
Or
The valley gleamed white
The fire blazed bright
The mist bound tight
And a shout from the height
Heralds life’s flight
As in their plight
The love of twins sets all to right
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Post by ivyrose on Jul 26, 2015 23:35:32 GMT -5
I like the first one better. |
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Post by SisterofSix on Aug 3, 2015 7:42:59 GMT -5
I can't decide which is better. They do kind of remind me of the line from the Misty Mountains song though. "The trees like torches flamed with light." (Or something like that.)
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Aug 3, 2015 17:06:30 GMT -5
I ended up changing the last two lines, so this is what it is now:
The valley gleamed white
The fire blazed bright
The mist bound tight
And a shout from the height
Summons your doom, as conquering plight
Through love the twins set all to right.
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Post by lothroniel on Aug 21, 2015 23:03:16 GMT -5
Referring to the Cyth/Analissa object question... while jewelry is traditional... a stone could also work- a la Kili and Tauriel. Or a nut or seed of some kind- those can have all kinds of symbolism. Or... it could be a carved wooden or metal flower- a representation of a flower that's precious to one or both of them for some reason. Also, there is a 'language of flowers' which could also be used symbolically.
A weapon is also an option, but that would definitely be taken from him if he were captured.
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Aug 22, 2015 12:59:21 GMT -5
A carved stone is a good idea. Right now he has a scarf, which works well. But I might use a stone sometime in another story.
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Post by ivyrose on Sept 9, 2015 15:54:36 GMT -5
I have a question for you all: My trilogy has gone un-named for four years, other than the titles of the books, but as I near publication I'm wanting to have a name for the series. I've come up with one series name that I like, but it might be cheesy. Here's the 'back cover' of book one, Never Alone, to give you a taste of what the series is about. For fourteen-year-old Callie Nickly, the sacrifices that being a follower of Christ require are absolutely terrifying. Because her parents are hunted for practicing unlawful religion, and because they have decided to educate their children at home against government regulations, Callie’s family has no choice but to relocate countless times to evade prison, work camps, and ultimately, death. The many frightening years of living ‘underground’ have taken a toll on Callie’s faith, but nothing could have prepared her for that fateful July night when she and her two siblings were forced to flee for their lives. When a tragic accident separates the children, leaving Callie with severe physical impairments, even her extreme physical pain isn’t enough to mirror the hurts and questions that trouble her heart. Callie is left wondering; is there really a loving God? And if there is, why is He allowing such horrible things to happen? "Crusader" is the name I've chosen as a synonym for Christian. It is used throughout the 3 books. What do you think of "Courageous Crusader" as a series name? Any other thoughts or ideas? |
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Magbar could take it and wear the scarf just to make Cyth angry. But I'm thinking that if the scarf had verses from the Declarations on it, Draygan would have it burned before Cyth's very eyes. 
Well, I suppose it could be pronounced K-eye-th too...I'm not sure which one I started with, but I pronounce his name with the 'c' saying the 's' sound now.