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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Oct 29, 2015 10:27:54 GMT -5
I got an idea for a humorous set of first lines for a comedy about time travel and messing up time streams. Don't know if/when I'll write it, but here are the lines.
'I should have kept my mouth shut. Things might have turned out fine then...like, maybe we would have survived. But no; I had to comment on how I preferred ducks to chickens. But how was I to even know she was listening?'
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Post by AnnaBrie on Oct 29, 2015 16:49:33 GMT -5
That is wonderful. It give a very clear idea of character (It's a guy right?) and a sense of mystery.
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Oct 30, 2015 16:18:25 GMT -5
I've no idea.  I just have the first lines and a few vague ideas. |
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Post by AnnaBrie on Oct 30, 2015 16:28:51 GMT -5
Well it just sounds more like the way a guy would talk. But then perhaps it would be more interesting is it were a girl.
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Post by Corissa, Maiden of Praise on Mar 6, 2016 21:59:04 GMT -5
"They told me I was sophisticated." "When people tell me I'm special, it's all I can do to keep from laughing." "They said I was extraordinary. I prefer to think of myself as a normal girl with extraordinary opportunities." These are some of the ideas I've had for one of the books I'm writing- and I'll probably think of at least a dozen more before I'm done.  Thoughts? |
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Mar 7, 2016 7:25:10 GMT -5
I like the second one the best. First lines are normally quite fun, for me anyway. It's the ending lines which are really a pain.
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Post by Corissa, Maiden of Praise on Mar 7, 2016 10:22:36 GMT -5
Yes, they're lots of fun to come up with. The trouble is narrowing it down once you're finally ready for it! |
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Post by Anne of Lothlorien on Mar 7, 2016 11:31:58 GMT -5
There's so many things a prince is required to do. Have a tragic love story, slay a medium sized dragon, (at least that big!), and complete some impossible task with the help of magic tools so you can rescue the fair maiden who's been trapped in a tower for her whole life, spinning her way to a freedom which the bad guy never intends to give!
But how am I to do all that when I have so much climbing to do?
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Mar 9, 2016 7:14:40 GMT -5
Love it!
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Post by Anne of Lothlorien on Mar 18, 2016 21:42:51 GMT -5
Thanks. I'm trying to figure out how to make that into a humorous retelling of a bunch of fairy tales mixed together.
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Post by writefury on Apr 4, 2016 10:43:04 GMT -5
I was thinking of maybe starting a story with a play on "T'was a dark and stormy night" sometime. Like... "It was a dark and stormy night.... just kidding. Actually it was a decently sunny day. I never get any warning about these sorts of things."
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Post by Anne of Lothlorien on Apr 4, 2016 13:02:57 GMT -5
That would be funny! Maybe you could do a whole series like that, and use other quotes like...
"It was the best of times, and it was the worst of times. Actually, I just said that to sound literary-like. It really was the most terrible three and a half weeks of my life."
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Post by HopeAnnSchmidt on Apr 5, 2016 6:59:13 GMT -5
That sounds hilarious! |
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Post by Anne of Lothlorien on Apr 6, 2016 22:13:47 GMT -5
Here's another one.
"You know the saying 'Call me Ishmael?'
I don't. Which is why I was totally confused when this guy started saying it over and over to me, and asking if I thought a story about a giant whale would be interesting. He said the whale's name was Mopey Stick or something like that. Weird."
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Post by writefury on Apr 22, 2016 16:14:44 GMT -5
Love both of those, Anne! XD
Or maybe: "It is a fact universally acknowledged that a single man in possession of a fortune must be on the run for his life from a crowd of 'eligible young ladies'."
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I just have the first lines and a few vague ideas. 
